Haiku and the Pictograph in Earth Language, "bring to the willow"

Haiku and the Pictograph in EL, "bring to the willow" - March 2006 -

This is an EL (Earth Language) experimental page to enjoy
the image of a haiku/short poem originally in English/Japanese.
When you can't see the Japanese parts, please don't mind and just skip those parts.
地球語の文字や文字絵を用いて詩的表現や翻訳を試みる実験のページです。

When I was reading the "Haiku Ireland" web site that Angelee in India introduced to me,
I found this warm-hearted haiku in -haibun- ‘Barbed-Wire & Butterflies’by Jim Norton
that was awarded 4th place in the Nobuyuki Yuasa International Haibun Competition 2004.
In the early spring sun light, I hope the bristled buds of willows gently shine on the kids,
who lost their moms by the waterside calamities that occurred in recent years on this planet.
The plant name "willow" is not set up in EL yet; so here I expressed the plant
as the waterside tree with bristle covered buds.
Although there is a way to show the name using only two characters.

今月は、インドのアンジェリーさんがご紹介くださったHaiku Irelandの
２００４年度の俳文受賞作でJim Norton さんの ‘Barbed-Wire & Butterflies’の中に出ていた俳句です。
この１年余りの間にアジアやルイジアナの水辺で家族を無くしたこどもたちに、この句を届けたくなりました。
willowは、ふつう日本でいう猫柳のこと、温かくなりはじめた日差しを浴びて、
毛に包まれた花芽がふっくらふくらむやさしさ・・
地球語の｢柳｣の文字は、２文字設定が可能ですが、まだ設定していないのでここでは少々長めに表しました。

chick

The original English by Jim Norton:
bring to the willow
all the weeping of your heart
motherless chicks

The Japanese translation:
柳にこい母なき雛よ泣きにこい

The EL translation:

The symbols in the pictograph:

: tear (s)(涙),

: bird (鳥)

The symbols in the translation:

: the head mark for requesting to do something (

: want)
The word following this head and between

and

shows the one called for the request. (～してください)
the grammatical notation to form a d-verb: meaning that the subject of this sentence becomes in the condition shown by the following character/phrase; or the subject does the following action. In this case, the subject of this verb is 'motherless chicks'.

{

exist,

received} have/possess,

heading}: bringing,

: bring (vt. ) (もってくる)

{ preposition symbol,

the heading direction}: to, for (～へ)

{

water,

{

limit,

place} edge}: waterside (水辺)

{

nature,

plant} (tree shaped fundamental ideogram): tree (木)

{ preposition,

joined}: with (～で、～とともに）、～つきの)

{

hair,

covered}: bristle covered/hairy (毛で覆われた)

{

plant,

heart} (flower shaped fundamental ideogram): flower (花)
to show that the following word or phrase is an accusative case of a d-verb, and that is influenced by the action of the subject. English doesn't need this kind of mark, but EL needs it because of the free sequence for subject, object and verb.

{